2018 Poetry Form Challenge

#06 Luc Bat Sonnet

An interesting form using the Vietnamese Luc-Bat and presenting it in the form of a sonnet. Luc-Bat means six-eight, referring to the syllabic count in the lines.
The poem consists of six and eight syllable counts.
The first line starts with six syllables the next line has eight. The sixth syllable of the second line must rhyme with the first line of the previous line and the eighth rhyme with the last line of the next line which is six syllables again. The final octasyllable line rhyming with the first line. I think you can see the French influence here.
Thus we end up with a rhyme pattern. . a. (a.x.b) b. (b.x.c)..etc..d. (d.x.a)

Copying the Italian sonnet, the combination of an octave and a sestet the rhyme scheme will go:
OOOOOA
OOOOOAOB
OOOOOB
OOOOOBOC
OOOOOC
OOOOOCOD
OOOOOD
OOOOODOA

OOOOOE
OOOOOEOF
OOOOOB
OOOOOBOG
OOOOOG
OOOOOGOE
But combined as 14 lines, like the true Italian Sonnet:



Luc Bat Sonnet Challenge Replies

Kathy Anderson

Cosmic Love

Terry Clitheroe

Beyond Eternity
Dreamtime
Family Dinner
Gurney Beach
Happy Waltz
Question of Patience
Soulmates
Wine
Pan 1
Pan 2
Pan 3
Pan 4
Pan 5

Divena Collins

Patience With Calm
Peace With Serenity

Etain Druantia
Butterflies Dance
Tongue In Cheek

Jem Farmer

A Spear Through Cloud
Chimes the Found


Leny Roovers

Dreams of You
On the Plane



Kathy Anderson

Cosmic Love

With gravity, we're held,
Constructed by loves envelope
Of time and space in scopes
Higher than cosmos hopes to join
Two hearts into one loin,
Melting chocolate purloined by heat
Flowing beings accrete,
Growing together, meet impelled
Against the waste of hours
Too long spent interred from the light
Now sprung forth to elope
To the asteroid roped Saturn,
Another belt returns
In its ellipse burning with power.

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Terry Clitheroe

Beyond Eternity

Wondering how much I love thee
I know you are the key
Just look and you will see how much.
Man has no measure as such
It becomes more each touch or look.
It says so in the book
And once caught can't unhook, ever
We will never sever, you'll see.
We will have our moments
Of upsets and torments, but know
In the end love will grow.
Realise there is a flow, a bond
That if we should respond
It will take us beyond moments.



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Dreamtime

Eyes looking inviting
A simple kiss delighting, wants more
That kiss opened a door
Loves portal forevermore 'tis said.
That simple kiss started
Thoughts much more delighted, and so
From that we saw love grow
And now, certain we know, fears shed.
Time spent but not wasted
Touches with feather tipped finger
All dreams willingly linger
What a simple harbinger tasted.
Eyes close but not in dread
As loves pleasures start to spread further.



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Family Dinner

There is no snow just heat
Winter admits defeat for now
So birds and pig and sow
Purchased with a sweaty brow today
On the 1st makes its way
To families who will stay awhile
And to each other smile
Dining in a happy style and eat
Far more than what's normal
In a manner less formal this time
Family together is fine
Talking'n eating's no crime today
Everyone wants their say
It's the older form of gay and normal.



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Happy Waltz

Dancing in the rain-
Feeling the cold, the pain, cast down
From the sky- then the clown
Being cleansed as I drown my sense
Ridding emotions less dense
And the walls of defence, I'm free
To be who I wanna be
Knowing that you love me again.
Splashing puddles in joy
Believing I'm not a toy to you
Its time for another view
One with our debut together
Now time is just a blur
Spinning as we concur our joy.



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Question of Patience

What is the use of time?
Speed causes angers climb upwards.
Patience earns no rewards
Slowly moving towards your goal,
Knowing love makes you whole,
Prepared to pay the toll and more.
It's all that you asked for
A prize is at the core - sublime!
If you were in control
Would you feel more whole to do
What you always wanted to,
Or somehow always felt 'twas wrong
Following feelings too strong,
Or time took much too long, to feel whole?



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Soulmates

Oh innocent victim
Finally you're at the brim of life
Know there will be no strife
And love will be so alive, and great.
It's such a pleasant state
When a man's found his mate for keeps
Pleasure goes ahead in leaps
Then one day, see one weeps, it's Fate.
One has gone, one is dead
A fact that lovers will dread, ever
To soulmates bound together
In time they'll meet forever that's true
And thought each time is new
With each life love will accrue til Nirvana.



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Wine

Wine effect's is than you
Your kiss a headier brew, I know
So abundant in it's flow
So warming the afterglow I feel
It's affect like wine I reel
Too much, so much appeal so nice
And yet so cheap a price
For this exotic spice, from you.
You fill my glass freely
Offerings made sweetly it's said
From lips like wine so red
Drive senses from our head, until
We have lost all our will
Once again my glass I fill ideally.



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Your Music

My music is thy hearts beat.
Thy words are songs so sweet I swoon
No way am I immune.
My song in time I croon with you
A duet matched by few.
But think nothing is new with love
'Cept the cast list'd above
There's no change we're kind of complete.
Realise we're like children
Who ignore all wise men because
They know only loves flaws
And say that we should pause awhile;
But all lovers just smile
Because they are beguiled again.



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Pan 1

When the world is new born
Sun's scattered seeds are sown and fall
On ground no good at all
Yet see some fruit grow tall and lush
Berries ripe on every bush.
And other life forms push through earth
As day starts giving birth
Playing, wondering the worth of man
Why the Gods created Pan
How he fits in the plan or scheme
What's the heavenly dream?
Wondering is their theme a jest
As the sun finds earths crest
You harken to him best at dawn.



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Pan 2

Now, hear his spirits rise
Each time he greets the prize of morn
Out of darkness is torn
Pan's gift of newly born, bright day.
Music helping blow away
Cobwebs of a yesterday of sin
Weakness of human kin
Each fresh morning begin anew
End of night bids adieu
Smiling waiting the new daybreaks
Never the same mistakes
But everyone still makes the same
The nature of the game
Dawn's a picture frame disguise.



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Pan 3

His finale at last,
All on Earths has passed to musk
The sun's a red dwarf husk
Last time, he plays at dusk his dirge
No more will feelings surge
No more has man the urge to fly
Weary now, time to die.
Nor is there need to cry, it's time.
No sun from the East climb
Life's clock a final chime then murk
Angels have done their work
All that time they didn't shirk and now
He stands, they fly in a row
Honouring as they go silent past.



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Pan 4

Again another bang
Just like the other sprang in site
New Universe fresh light
God shows us his might, again
Cosmos spurting semen
We see new suns begin to glow
New world begin to grow
New life begins to show and form
Sunlight reaches out to warm
See it begin to swarm and play
See him at break of day
The creatures listening sway at morn
Greeting the fresh new dawn
Beast or plant that's born or sprang.



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Pan5

Once I heard the piper play
It was the break of day so still
Beasts sitting on the hill
Listening to him until the end
Each united each a friend
Every silhouette did blend just then
Just now Earth is Heaven.
Angels listening with men at peace
Just for a while release
Pan has caused a cease to war
See them sit on the floor
How can anyone ignore this fact
Look there, a peaceful act
Why can't they make this pact today?

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Divena Collins

Patience With Calm

Time has been part of us
Whether early on time or too late
Just a question of fate
No precious time to wait at all
Has to be there on call
Impatience may fall from stature
A part of human nature
Wonders of natures cures invented
That future prevented
But aroma`s of a scented calm
Within a soothing balm
Should do nobody any harm but good
No inclination to brood
Creating a calming mood for us.



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Peace With Serenity

By the calm of the ocean
How gentle the motion of waves
Foaming of tides thro` caves
Playful water nymphs brave the tide
Upon crests of surf they ride
`Neath a full moon to guide them thro`
Gently the breezes blew
Over a wide ocean of blueish green
Mermaids were to be seen
Basking the rocks serene of mind
It was there they did find
Perfect peace a kind of emotion
For love and devotion
Within calm of the deep blue ocean.




Art Work by J. W. Waterhouse
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Etain Druantia


Butterflies Dance

Butterflies dance, knees quake,
restless, disturbed, awake, I wait,
for Life has shown my Fate
and so to future mate I fly,
not once to question why.
Mom sighed when I said bye to her,
but knows our love is pure;
yes, my heart is quite sure of him-
this is no foolish whim.
Green eyes meet blue, both brim with love,
one lifetime not enough
True love stands out above the rest-
we passed this trying test...
Now two as one our nest we make.

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Tongue In Cheek

"Here's a new challenge for you.
Post your attempt when through with it."
Don't throw creative fit-
just work on it bit by bit, just try,
no need for being shy.
Don't bother asking why, just do.
I write mine on the loo.
Some good, some bad, all true they are;
right folded some fly far.
Then there's those in the car I write,
now those are rather trite.
Yet still I post my blight online-
you'll always say it's fine,
you'd never dare my rhymes eschew.

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Jem Farmer

A Spear Through Cloud

As voices call aloud
Bring it forth through the crowd, young men,
Amid the tales of then,
Through valley and wild glen we call,
Bring light and love to all,
Lift winter's icy shawl from earth,
To celebrate a birth,
With our laughter and mirth, inspire,
All that we should desire,
To light the Pagan fire of Yule,
One log that is the fuel,
The Sun King shall soon rule the year,
An end of darkness, near,
And dawn's first ray, a spear through cloud.



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Chimes the Found

It's beginning the way,
The dawn of a new day of dreams,
That echo flowing streams,
And mystery now seems to sound,
The bell that chimes the found,
As feet step on the ground then wend,
The soul becomes a friend
As will begins to bend with need,
Those wantings dare to feed,
Planted a simple seed of thought,
And thus, the heart is caught,
While senses flame and taut reveal
There is more to love's deal,
When we hear what we feel can say.

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Leny Roovers

Dreams of You

I dream of you at night
There burns a fire bright in me
Which makes me feel so free
This warming glow will be shared soon
Under a Southern moon
A starry sky a boon of fate
I meet at last my mate
We hope at any rate this much
Shall know for sure on touch
Then we will both know such sweet bliss
Forget that we did miss
To touch and hold and kiss for long
It made our love real strong
Nothing can now go wrong this night.

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On the Plane

Into the night I fly
I hear a baby crying loud
a mother gives a shout
a father takes it out of bed
some older children fret
they just want to be fed some more
though they have been before
flying is but a bore to them
all they can do is dram
the parents cannot hem them in
they look sheepish and grin
when their kids won't finish fast
so it's quiet at last
I slept, hours passed, I woke there.

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