Poetic Constellations



2016 Poetry Form Challenge

#07 Villanelle Sonnet




The Villanelle Sonnet started out as just an amusing variation to the Villanelle, but as can be seen from the post below it ended up as a form to be reckoned with also.
The unique thing about the Villanelle Sonnet is that the first and third lines of the first verse become the alternating final lines of the next three verses. So the choice of the first and last line is very important, and more so because in the last stanza they form a couplet and become the "Closure".
If things weren't difficult enough already, all the 2nd lines of each stanza rhyme with each other.
In the first example, all that is necessary is to miss out the last three line stanza and also the last stanza ignores the duet addition and just continues with the repeating first and last line of the first stanza.
Here is that example.

I figured it out

I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out
No longer am I going to search every way
No longer is there a need for you to shout

Each day when I wake there's a loving drought
Each time as I wake there's only pain each day
I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out

No longer will there be coffee's smell about
Breakfast shared alternate bite tasted play
No longer is there a need for you to shout

Looks devoured each other, kissed with a pout
Stolen moments, kisses took as time went astray
I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out

I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out
No longer is there a need for you to shout

Ryter Roethicle
As an alternative to the form, here is an example of a Villanelle Sonnet, please note it is presented with repeated lines opposite to the standard lines Villanelle because of using 14 lines to qualify as a sonnet, as should the first example.
Here is the alternative example

I figured it out

I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out
No longer am I going to search every way
No longer is there a need for you to shout
Each day when I wake there's a loving drought
Each time as I wake there's only pain each day
No longer is there a need for you to shout
No longer will there be coffee's smell about
Breakfast shared alternate bite tasted play
I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out
Looks devoured each other, kissed with a pout
Stolen moments, kisses took as time went astray
No longer is there a need for you to shout
I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out
No longer is there a need for you to shout

Ryter Roethicle


Villanelle Sonnet Posts



Kathy Anderson

Ancient One
I have..(Alternate Finish)
Missing Words
Nantosuelta

Terry Clitheroe

About Me
Because I figured it out
Cry Loudly
Esta Muerta
Kool
Left Counting the Stars
Moonlight
Nature
Only Time Will Tell
Prisoner
So much to do
Twilight Glimmers
When Darkness Looms
Zetetic

Lorraine Dafney

Peace

Etain Druantia

Peace

Maureen Murphy

Brumal Regrets

Ryter Roethicle

Dignity. A Trio of Sonnets
Missing Love?
Nature
Nature's Birth
No Regrets
Nature
Out of the Void
Sunset in Melbourne
You Saved Me

Leny Roovers

Some days I can't wait
There are those days

Trewir Wintlek

A Gift Of Love



Kathy Anderson

Ancient One

Ancient wings unfurled, helplessly she screamed
To find she had been caught, without a thought,
Her own mind gone and mesmerized by dreams.
The ancient one was a daevas of dreams
Fallen from the heavenliest clouds gods wrought,
Ancient wings unfurled, helplessly she screamed.
She didn't know the way or how to scheme
For she had fallen for nothing but aught,
Her own mind gone and mesmerized by dreams.
He never told her why he'd come, nor themed
Away her concerns for her darkened plight,
Ancient wings unfurled, helplessly she screamed.
Ancient wings unfurled, helplessly she screamed,
Her own mind gone and mesmerized by dreams.

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I Have....(Alternate Finish)

I have an open field ahead.
Life is full of these daydream plots,
That haunt the night and bless days tread.
I have walked many miles in dread,
Some fields I found were tiny plots,
Mere spots in a scheme of few threads.
I've dreamt and died in each, then bled
From mortal wounds that cannot
Then heal, the olden daydreams shed.
I've thought dreams were so golden, said
My heart, to the trees that stand in lots,
And they told me not to embed;
What I have I should then make stead,
Polish old plots, more dreams my jots.

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Missing Words

The sun is warm on lowly pine branches
Gathering rays melt away icicles,
Makes way for gladder tidings, our wishes.
On the wind a spoken prayer there brushes
Our ears with hope for a new years cycles,
Makes way for gladder tidings, our wishes.
A new years promise comes without patches,
Reminding us to speak softer, circles,
The sun is warm on lowly pine branches
Missing nothing as the sun now reaches,
We bless thoughts as they sing on lofty sails,
Makes way for gladder tidings, our wishes.
The sun is warm on lowly pine branches,
Makes way for gladder tidings, our wishes.

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Nantosuelta

Gaia in her new emerald silken dress
Awakens beneath snow laden cold ground
Awakened by Sun staying high above to digress
Each day Carmenae's inspirations bless
Lest the muse sleep on, keeping underground
Gaia in her new emerald silken dress
Warming moments to evolve love found,
Awakened by Sun staying high above to digress
Gaia in her emerald silken dress
To momentary storms she must impress
Springs time has begun unfolding her round
Gaia in her new emerald silken dress
Gaia in her new emerald silken dress
Awakens beneath snow laden cold ground.

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Terry Clitheroe

About Me

For a while I knew someone
Who made me feel complete
Smiling now though she is gone
When she died life was done
And for a while I felt I was beat
Smiling now though she is gone
Love had briefly shone upon
Two souls that did briefly meet
For a while I knew someone
Soul mate and I meet once again
Finally the closure is complete
Smiling now though she is gone
For a while I knew someone
Smiling now though she is gone.

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Because I figured it out

No need to give up, because I figured it out
No longer am I going to search every way
No longer is there a need for you to shout
When I wake up I search for you in vain
Now when I wake up there is only pain
No longer is there a need for you to shout
No longer will there be the coffee's smell
Breakfast shared alternate bite tasted well
No need to give up, because I figured it out
The way we devoured each other with a look
The touching, stolen moments kisses took
No longer is there a need for you to shout
I'm finally giving it up, I figured it out
No longer is there a need for you to shout.

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Cry Loudly

Cry loudly now, creatures of the night
As bent on it's way the creature flies
Leathered wings beat in the moonlight
The maidens open window comes in sight
Hair askew in slumber on her bed she lies
Leathered wings beat in the moonlight
Changing quietly he moves into her sight
At first there is fear, then loves surprise
Cry loudly now, creatures of the night
Her throat, her soul she offers, invites his bite
Eternal life, but death to see the sunrise
Leathered wings beat in the moonlight
Cry loudly now, creatures of the night
Leathered wings beat in the moonlight.

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Esta Muerta

For a while I knew someone
Who made me feel complete
Smiling now though she is gone
For a while she was the one
Who simply swept me off my feet
Smiling now though she is gone
When she died life was done
And for a while I felt I was beat
For a while I knew someone
Love had briefly shone upon
Two souls that did briefly meet
Smiling now though she is gone
For a while I knew someone
Smiling now though she is gone.

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Kool

"May I be your dragon" he said,
She felt his hot breath upon her
"I'd prefer to call you friend instead."
"Until now your sight I did dread,
I know now what I do prefer,
I'd prefer to call you friend instead."
"Let's look towards the travels ahead
Enemies, problems, I will deter,
May I be your dragon" he said,
"I now look towards the years ahead
Which will pass in an endless blur."
"I'd prefer to call you friend instead.
"You are my dragon," she said.
"I'd prefer to call you friend instead."

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Left Counting the Stars

Now is the time for tears, no more loud hurrahs
You are gone; my bed is now empty and silent.
With the death of love, I'm left counting the stars.
When our love was new we had no scars
Now all that remains of you is your scent.
With the death of love, I'm left counting the stars.
There is no prize, no cheers and no fat cigar
Just a terrible feeling of my life being spent.
Now is the time for tears, no more loud hurrahs
Now I see a zero of all I thought was ours
What can I do, can I hope or must I lament?
With the death of love, I'm left counting the stars.
Now is the time for tears, no more loud hurrahs
With the death of love, I'm left counting the stars.

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Moonlight

As I lead you by the hand into the night
Stealing away the cares of the day
And lighting our way by moonlight
My heart is sure what we do now is right
And of tomorrows no hint give they
And lighting our way by moonlight
The shadowy flutter of an owl in flight
Leads us along our grassy way
As I lead you by the hand into the night
I gaze upon your love shining bright
Craving this moment to forever stay
And lighting our way by moonlight
As I lead you by the hand into the night
And lighting our way by moonlight.

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Nature

All this was given to man and his conceit
And live in simple ways upon the Earth
Somewhere to live an abundance to eat.
Living as one with the Earth, a simple feat
Feeding, nourishing, finding out life's worth
Somewhere to live an abundance to eat.
Those who know never have to compete
Following ancient ways there is no dearth
All this was given to man and his conceit
The ancients never had need to steal or cheat
The bosom of Nature is a bountiful berth
Somewhere to live an abundance to eat.
All this was given to man and his conceit
Somewhere to live an abundance to eat.

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Only Time Will Tell

Love's waiting across the room for that first look,
The first smile, and the first tremor that says it all
That moment realising you're completely hooked.
There have been no guidelines set in any book
There is no mentor waiting for you to call
That moment realising you're completely hooked.
There is naught you wont do, by hook or by crook
On your knees on broken glass you would crawl
Love's waiting across the room for that first look.
And you find contentment, now you have looked
In comparison all your previous lovers pall
That moment realising you're completely hooked.
Love's waiting across the room for that first look
That moment realising you're completely hooked.

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Prisoner

Like a prisoner you have me bound to you
But not with chains of hard blue steel
Not counting days and weeks till freedom due.
There was no crime, or deed, or whistle blew
There are no prison bars, my hands to feel
Like a prisoner you have me bound to you.
Instead its bonds of love that angels brew
A wound from cupids dart that will not heal
Not counting days and weeks till freedom due.
No fear of breakout or escape, no strike or coup
My life is sealed by chance, just one deal
Like a prisoner you have me bound to you.
Like a prisoner you have me bound to you.
Not counting days and weeks till freedom due.

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So much to do

So much to do so much to share
Opening the box with a heavy sigh
With each love a life of care
Last few months you were not there
Our love together its time is nigh
With each love a life of care
Lying on the bed I stroke your hair
True loves helps when it's time to die
So much to do so much to share
I wonder of what you are aware
This way means there's no goodbye
With each love a life of care
So much to do so much to share
With each love a life of care.

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Twilight Glimmers

Twilight glimmers with unclaimed dreams
Casts away the promises made by the day
Do not live a life hidden by moonbeams.
An unsatisfied life spent in useless schemes
All the time, greed is holding reality at bay
Do not live a life hidden by moonbeams.
Is life more or less like those soapy scenes
Or promises of what you want if you pray
Twilight glimmers with unclaimed dreams
Cast it all aside and ignore their screams
Believe in a life lit by the Suns first ray
Do not live a life hidden by moonbeams.
Twilight glimmers with unclaimed dreams
Do not live a life hidden by moonbeams.

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When Darkness Looms

When darkness looms, tomorrow fades away
No comforting light shines upon or within
It's hard to see beyond this dreary day
Tonight only foulest evil shall hold sway
And blackest night shall pave the way for sin
It's hard to see beyond this dreary day
Deep in the night is when the wicked will play
Fixating on sorrow's grueling tailspin
When darkness looms, tomorrow fades away
All living things seem hollow, full of decay
As long as it stays dark, evil will always win
It's hard to see beyond this dreary day
When darkness looms, tomorrow fades away
It's hard to see beyond this dreary day.

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Zetetic

Past experience tells me I should forget
Yet there are things we should remember
But not the times of blood, tears and sweat.
And mans stupidity and greed lingers yet
But this is all laid aside each November
Past experience tells me I should forget
That I was not there, I do not regret
And yet am proud to be called digger
But not the times of blood, tears and sweat.
There are memories of a shared cigarette
Death came with the third burning ember
Past experience tells me I should forget
Past experience tells me I should forget
But not the times of blood, tears and sweat.

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Lorraine Dafney

With You

Sometimes its like a fairy tale
The way you love me and thats why
I want to share my life with you
You boost my morale I can't fail
For I have you to make me try
Sometimes its like a fairy tale
I happily walk on this trail
You are such a wonderful guy
I want to share my life with you
As I float on clouds that set sail
Higher and higher I can fly
Sometimes its like a fairy tale
Sometimes its like a fairy tale
I want to share my life with you.


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Etain Druantia

Peace

From a rocky summit I see
Amongst green trees ponds shimmer blue
The world's at peace as it should be
Lone hawk circles, noble and free
Claiming right to unhindered view
The world's at peace as it should be
A buzzing hum, a tiny bee
Dining on nectar, blossom's dew
From a rocky summit I see
Clear air of dreams breathed in deeply
Times to come washed in golden hue
The world's at peace as it should be
From a rocky summit I see
The world's at peace as it should be.


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Maureen Murphy

Brumal Regrets

Snow silences the meadow where we laid
as lovers, embraced under summer's sun
while clouds skated by, like floats on parade.
Forever had echoed in breaths we bade,
assured love cycled a timeless season;
while clouds skated by, like floats on parade.
But summer faded, the tired sun strayed,
autumn's storms blighted love's amassed foison
Snow silences the meadow where we laid
How wretched is my memory's brigade,
fermenting heart's ache with regret's poison;
while clouds skated by, like floats on parade.
The clouds still skate by, in dismal parade;
while clouds skated by, like floats on parade.


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Ryter Roethicle

Dignity

So much to do so much to share
Opening the box with a heavy sigh
With each love a life of care
Love as much as you would dare.
Helping your lover with tear filled eye
With each love a life of care
Last few months you were not there
Our love together its time is nigh
So much to do so much to share
Lying on the bed I stroke your hair
True loves helps when it's time to die
With each love a life of care
So much to do so much to share
With each love a life of care

2

Lying here on the bed together
Lying under my right forearm
The last months seem like forever
No one will separate us ever
You cannot come to any harm
The last months seem like forever
Not remembering life together
No longer knowing who I am
Lying here on the bed together
Sharing good and nasty weather
At long last I feel really calm
The last months seem like forever
Lying here on the bed together
The last months seem like forever

3

Constant loss showing in your eye
We have shared so much as one
Your body has outlived the Ki
No longer knowing who am I
Everything in your mind has gone
Your body has outlived the Ki
Stroke my face as I start to cry
All our love has been undone
Constant loss showing in your eye
Pills we took soon closed your eyes
Breathing slows soon we'll be gone
Your body has outlived the Ki
Constant loss showing in your eye
Your body has outlived the Ki.

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Missing Love?

The world is white and love is gone
Bereft of life why should it stay?
There is nothing to build upon.
Where is the beach, where is the lawn?
There is absence of life in every way.
The world is white and love is gone.
Most plants have died life is withdrawn
Even the sky is now coloured grey.
There is nothing to build upon.
But will love wait until spring's dawn,
When lovers meet and say, "Good day?"
The world is white but is love gone?
The world is white but is love gone,
There is nothing to build upon?

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Nature

With every chance new life will start
the simple ways that feel the earth
as one with Nature, becoming a part
Living with the earth, finding the art
feeding, nourishing, finding worth
with every chance new life will start
This simple way builds up the heart
man living with Nature is given birth
as one with Nature, becoming a part
Man should learn and become smart
follow tribal ways live with the earth
with every chance new life will start
As one with Nature, becoming a part
With every chance new life will start

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Nature's Birth

The smell of fire is on the wind,
And a cloud of smoke hides the sun.
Nature is birthing we mustn't mind.
In the past the natives grinned,
For he and nature were as one.
The smell of fire is on the wind.
The mountain horseman you will find,
Nurtured their mountain home.
Nature is birthing we mustn't mind.
But politicians are never kind,
And all the mountain men are gone.
The smell of fire is on the wind.
The smell of fire is on the wind,
Nature is birthing we mustn't mind.

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No Regrets

I do not regret my life or lose sleep
As it passes like smoke from a chimney
And Winters cold cannot make me weep.
The lessons learned did not come cheap
Bruises and broken limbs are often costly
I do not regret my life or lose sleep.
Yet love is finally here with vows to keep
I am content with things now as they be
And Winters cold cannot make me weep.
Still you stir so many emotions deep
Not losing freshness of passions eye
I do not regret my life or lose sleep
I do not regret my life or lose sleep
And Winters cold cannot make me weep.

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Out of the Void

Out of the void my love has grown,
A cosmic speck, the minutest grain.
Out of nothing a seed was sown.
Not of wood, nor steel, nor brick or stone
No roof of tile that will shelter from pain.
Out of the void my love has grown.
A pulsing heart, inside flesh and bone
Made of love, that will ever gain.
Out of nothing a seed was sown.
Two separate souls that are now one
Ever sure that it is not in vain.
Out of the void my love has grown.
Out of the void my love has grown
Out of nothing a seed was sown.

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Sunset in Melbourne

Shadows lengthen as evening nears
The stage is right as the red sun sets
And the smoke that is dusk appears.
In time the city disappears
And in that light sites seem to melt
Shadows lengthen as evening nears
And with it manifest to fears
Still light but with this grey visette
And the smoke that is dusk appears.
To soon for other frontiers
Soon Nature will collect her debts
Shadows lengthen as evening nears
Shadows lengthen as evening nears
And the smoke that is dusk appears.

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You Saved Me

Tonight you held my doubting hand,
Whilst the world I knew spun away.
You saved me in a foreign land.
Falling in love was not planned,
Promising colours instead of grey.
You saved me in a foreign land.
I did not want love or demand
That you would spend with me your day
Tonight you held my doubting hand,
I opened my mind to your plan
And happy that I'm going to stay
You saved me in a foreign land.
Tonight you held my doubting hand,
You saved me in a foreign land.

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Leny Roovers

Some days I can't wait

Some days I can't wait patiently
Uncertainty just makes me swear
I just want you to be with me
It is not like me to wait and see
It is so difficult to bear
I just want you to be with me
You call, talk to me tenderly
Of love we both want to declare
Some days I can't wait patiently
The phones are bad as they can be
Because a storm passed over there
I just want you to be with me
Some days I can't wait patiently!
I just want you to be with me!

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There are those days

There are those days my need for you is great
I cannot seem to function anymore
What is this for a lousy trick of Fate?
I want you here and in my present state
We wouldn't waste our time with talk before
What is this for a lousy trick of Fate?
I'd have you in my bed just freshly made
We would be doing all we both adore
There are those days my need for you is great
All we can do is wait and set the date
When we can finally be joined in core
What is this for a lousy trick of Fate?
There are those days my need for you is great
What is this for a lousy trick of Fate?

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Trewir Wintlek

A Gift Of Love

Our hearts emotions dwell in the loving writings we tell
Where tender, gentle, loving words we have expressed
He has always been there, whenever our passions swell
We begin seeing loyalty of man and woman's magical spells
Spells of loving, of caring of giving; an Angel sent and blest
Our Hearts emotions dwell in the loving writings we tell
He gave us guidance to be brave when weakness fell
we acted foolish, he comforts us when we were obsessed
He has always been there, whenever our passions swell
Our faith, our trust, our dreams are now our highest sell
Now as we still learn love center's, our souls are pressed
Our hearts emotions dwell in the loving writings we tell
Our hearts emotions dwell in the loving writings we tell
He has always been there, whenever our passions swell


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